The Fun Day At Sailing

On Monday weak 7 Room 4 went to Bucklands Beach to learn how to sail we had races water fight but i was cut my my friend  Jade using somethings on the boat so he send me to the one of the boat who was looking after us. when I got on the big boat. we started to splash water to other people which  was petty fun but i was throwed out of the boat and went I swimed back on the boat and i started doing it again and then i jumped of the boat. a few minutes past we went on a boat to ride on and some people saw a shark but no one died thats a good thing that no one died because we will be sad and then mother will be too.By the way there was  to boat one saw the shark and the other one did not.

Jing Long - you have great ideas here.   I like your information about the shark and how you would feel if someone was caught by it.
You now need to reread your work and figure out where the punctuation needs to go.  When you pause while reading- put in either a full stop or a comma.  Mrs Simpson